CRUZ+ARANTXA



good pron but hesitant discounts goes (go) I have to say (good) really discounts(real) really price(real price) other (/^-ª/, not /o-e/) trendy(good) people who has this illness (have this condition/problem) ||  || whether(very good ||  || SECOND PRESENTATION (7.5)
 * || ARANTXACRUZ(7) ||  ||
 * || MONOLOGUE ||  ||
 * || some (/^/, not /o/)
 * || INTERACTION ||  ||
 * || above all (/v/, not /f/)

for me is disgusting watch (it is disgusting to) watch (/o/, not (a/) to improve the pronunciation (our) sound...doesn´t exist (don´t) I choose 3 film (chose) It also base (is) pursuit (stress on the second, not first syllable)XX is more currently (recent) see through the film (throughout) I choose (have chosen) she imagine (+s) love (/l^v/, n ot /lof/) di**s**ease (/z/, not /s/) do whatever to take after of his son (look after/take care of) Interesting content- more fluency needed-still hesitant but making the right grammar choices- If you worked harder (speaking English)you would get top marks!

Review of //Childhood//

This novel tells us the childhood of a young boy who lives in a society plenty of violence, in the South Africa of the 40s and 50s. This book is full of feelings that everybody has experimented in its childhood. Everybody has felt at least once in its life lonely, or worried about little things, which when we grow up don't pay attention to them because they are children things. Through this novel we can see the childhood of a boy that lives in a controversial period. This young boy feels different from other boys because he starts taking care of his appearance and of what the others are thinking of him. So, we can remember our childhood, our feelings, because when we grow up we change our worries, and we are aware about the risks and we know the consequences of making a mistake. After reading this novel, I have to say that during the childhood there are too many new things that come to us at the same time and we aren’t mature enough to face them. It shows the worries and the feelings of a child that only wants to live in a complicated world that most of the time is confusing and unfair. I really like this book, its story and its meaning. It's easy to read and to understand and I strongly recommend it to my classmates. CORRECTIONS AND ASSESSMENT

Review of //Childhood//

This novel tells us the childhood of a young boy who lives in a society full of violence, in the South Africa of the 40s and 50s. This book is full of feelings that everybody has experienced in their childhood. Everybody has felt, at least once in their lives, lonely or worried about little things which we don't pay attention to when we are growing because they are children´s things. Through this novel we can see the childhood of a boy that lives in a controversial period. This young boy feels different from other boys. H e starts taking care of his appearance and he worries about what the others think of him. So, we can remember our childhood, our feelings : when we grow up our worries change, we become aware of risks and we discover the consequences of making a mistake. After reading this novel, I have to say that during our childhood there are too many new things that come to us at the same time and we aren’t mature enough to face them. The book shows the worries and the feelings of a child that only wants to live in a complicated world that most of the time is confusing and unfair. I really like this book, its story and its meaning. It's easy to read and to understand and I strongly recommend it to my classmates. = = =** OK but his text needs revising and rephrasing. You overuse two linkers (and & but ) and you should make an effort to rephrase some of them with "besides", "What´s more", "however" or "despite", for example. Your sentences have too many clauses and that forces you to repeat your two linkers too. Try reducing the number of subordinate clauses. When you revise your text filter out repeated words changing them into synonyms or paraphrases. **=

UNIT 4

This chart presents the percentage of voting in UK parliamentary elections between(1) 1983 - 2001. As shown in the chart overall there has been a steady decrease of voting in 2001 UK parliamentary elections in comparison with voting 1983. In 1983 75% of people between(2) 18 - 24 years old voted. In 2001, that figure fall to 50% a drop of 25%. In people between(3) 25 - 34% years old there was another fall in 2001 parliamentary elections. The percentage of voting of people between(4) 35-44 also took a step backward. It held 70%, 15% fewer voters than in 1983. Change between(5) people between(6) 45-54 and between(7) 55-64 is comparatively slower. In both cases the number of voters between(8) these ages only falls by 5%. In 1983 people 65+ held 82% of the total number of voters with these ages. In 2001 that figure rose to 85%, a climb of 3%. To sum up, the percentages of people who voted in 2001 indicates a drop. The statistics show that in 2001 people were less worried about voting than in 1983. Above all, people between(9) 45-65+ have more interest in parliamentary elections than people between(10) 18-44. These percentages show that young people are less conscious about parliamentary elections and nowadays prefer to go wherever instead of going to vote.

CORRECTIONS AND ASSESSMENT

UNIT 4

This chart presents the percentage of voting in UK parliamentary elections between 1983 - 2001. As shown in the chart, overall there has been a steady decrease of voting in 2001 UK parliamentary elections in comparison with voting turnout in 1983. In 1983 75% of people between 18 - 24 years old voted. In 2001, that figure fell to 50% a drop of 25%. In people aged 25-34 there was another fall in 2001 parliamentary elections. The percentage of voters between 35 and 44 also took a step backward : 70%, that is, 5% fewer voters than in 1983.

Change in the 45-54 and 55-64 groups is comparatively slower. In both cases the number of voters between these ages only falls by 5%. In 1983 people 65+ held 82% of the total number of voters in these ages. In 2001 that figure rose to 85%, a climb of 3%. To sum up, the percentages of people who voted in 2001 indicates a drop. The statistics show that in 2001 people were less worried about voting than in 1983. Above all, people 45-65+ year-olds have more interest in parliamentary elections than people between 18 and 44. These percentages show that young people are less interested in parliamentary elections and nowadays they prefer to go wherever instead of going to vote. = = =** OK but I counted the word //between// ten times. Please don´t do this in June if you want your certificate.One must always revise the text to avoid repetition. **=

UNIT 3

Hi Emmanuel, I’m sorry to tell you that this girl is bad news. There’s no doubt in my mind that she was using you to meet your best friend and be able to flirt with him. She’s not interested in a steady relationship with you, and she isn’t sincere with you and neither with herself(*). She likes you but as a friend. She realizes that your best friend is what she really wants and what she really was looking for. If I were you I asked her an explanation. I asked her and your best friend to talk about what happens. If your friend is really your best friend he’ll tell you what happens. He’ll tell you that he really likes but he didn’t know how to tell you the truth, because he didn’t want to hurt you. If not, you have to end your relationship with your friend, because having friends like him would be the worst thing you could do. Kisses, Arantxa UNIT 3

Hi Emmanuel, I’m sorry to tell you that this girl is bad news. There’s no doubt in my mind that she was using you to meet your best friend and be able to flirt with him. She’s not interested in a steady relationship with you, and she isn’t sincere with you and neither with herself(*). She likes you but as a friend. She realizes that your best friend is what she really wants and what she really was looking for. If I were you I asked her an explanation. I asked her and your best friend to talk about what happens. If your friend is really your best friend he’ll tell you what happens. He’ll tell you that he really likes but he didn’t know how to tell you the truth, because he didn’t want to hurt you. If not, you have to end your relationship with your friend, because having friends like him would be the worst thing you could do. Kisses, Arantxa

CORRECTIONS AND ASSESSMENT UNIT 3

Hi Emmanuel, I’m sorry to tell you that this girl is bad news. There’s no doubt in my mind that she was using you to meet your best friend and be able to flirt with him. She’s not interested in a steady relationship with you, and she isn’t sincere with you and neither with herself(*). She likes you, but as a friend. She realizes that your best friend is what she really wants and what she really was looking for. If I were you I would ask her for an explanation. I would ask her and your best friend to talk about what is going on. If your friend is really your best friend he’ll tell you what is happening. He’ll tell you that he really likes her but he didn’t know how to tell you the truth, because he didn’t want to hurt you. If not, you have to end your relationship with your friend, because having friends like him would be the worst thing you could do. Kisses, Arantxa = = =** (*)or to herself either **= =** OK but, again, as with your previous compositions, you need to reduce the number of subordinate clauses. **=